Wow James!! That piece of writing has lodes of amazing describing words like ‘ a blood curdeling feeling.’ I also liked the part when you ended on ‘ and that was the end of me.’ If you cocld tomake your work sond better you could have a fullstop after dracula. Thanks and it’s amazing!
Hi James , I really think this is an amazing piece of writing and your descriptions are superb . From what I can see this piece has no minor mistakes or any punctuation wrong . AWSOME!!!
From Noe (other class you know the one opposite potter).
you have made an amazing piece of writing, I loved how you described the scream as “blood curdling”. Also, I loved how you created an eery moment when “the noise stopped”. I think you could improve your punctuation because you were not putting a space between the full stop. But other than that EEEEEEEEEPPPPPPPPPPPPPPIIIIIIIIIIICCCCCCCCCC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Wow James!! That piece of writing has lodes of amazing describing words like ‘ a blood curdeling feeling.’ I also liked the part when you ended on ‘ and that was the end of me.’ If you cocld tomake your work sond better you could have a fullstop after dracula. Thanks and it’s amazing!
Brilliant James! I love the way you described ” blood curdling scream” And “dark red blood.
Hi James , I really think this is an amazing piece of writing and your descriptions are superb . From what I can see this piece has no minor mistakes or any punctuation wrong . AWSOME!!!
From Noe (other class you know the one opposite potter).
you have made an amazing piece of writing, I loved how you described the scream as “blood curdling”. Also, I loved how you created an eery moment when “the noise stopped”. I think you could improve your punctuation because you were not putting a space between the full stop. But other than that EEEEEEEEEPPPPPPPPPPPPPPIIIIIIIIIIICCCCCCCCCC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!