Wow Jesse, great stuff. However there was a tiny mistake which would be sorted if you simply read it through again… Keep up the good work!
Well done Jesse, although it was a bit of a sad story! I liked the way you have been adding adjectives to your nouns to make them more exciting. Remember to read your work out aloud to yourself to check that it makes sense. Keep it up!
I will try in future and i will read aloud
The story is very good but you might want to add capitals. 4/5
The story is very good but you need to add some capitals.
The story is very good but you might want to add capitals
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Wow Jesse, great stuff. However there was a tiny mistake which would be sorted if you simply read it through again… Keep up the good work!
Well done Jesse, although it was a bit of a sad story! I liked the way you have been adding adjectives to your nouns to make them more exciting. Remember to read your work out aloud to yourself to check that it makes sense. Keep it up!
I will try in future and i will read aloud
The story is very good but you might want to add capitals. 4/5
The story is very good but you need to add some capitals.
The story is very good but you might want to add capitals