Great story Ella, I liked your first line because it was really discriptive and good maybe you could have done a bit more to improve but apart from that it was AMAZING! 🙂
I really enjoyed reading this because you used lots of great descriptive words. I also liked how you emphisized the woman’s French accent.
To improve it you could start a new line for every speech.
Apart from that it was brilliant!
Brilliant Ella! I really enjoyed your story, it had some cool names and good descriptive writing in it! Next time you could put some more writing in it burt anyway it was still amazing:)
Great story Ella, I liked your first line because it was really discriptive and good maybe you could have done a bit more to improve but apart from that it was AMAZING! 🙂
I really liked it because it was really descriptive.
I really enjoyed reading this because you used lots of great descriptive words. I also liked how you emphisized the woman’s French accent.
To improve it you could start a new line for every speech.
Apart from that it was brilliant!
Brilliant Ella! I really enjoyed your story, it had some cool names and good descriptive writing in it! Next time you could put some more writing in it burt anyway it was still amazing:)