the big accident

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3 Responses to the big accident

  1. Maariyah miriam lord year 5 says:

    I really liked your story it inspired me .I love the adjective you have used super well done ive got a picture in my head about the ankle that got twisted

  2. Clare Powell (Team 100WC) says:

    Hello Matilda. I enjoyed your 100 WC entry. I partiularly liked the way you set the place and the time at the start of your writing. You have selected verbs carefully. Try working on sentence openers, try starting with a verb or an adverb to add variety to your writing. Well done, keep writing.

  3. Hannah (100WC) says:

    Hi Matilda, a great 100WC post. I loved all the drama and action in your piece, you are a very imaginative writer. Great use of language as it really engages the reader to picture the whole story as they are reading. Keep up the good work!

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