Hi Niyusha, this is quite a good story. However, some words were repeated and some sentences didn’t make sence which made it hard to read. Otherwise, it was good and I liked the last sentence despite there being a lack of comma and speech marks. Keep blogging because I want a sequel…
Hey Niysha Sophie here
Your story blew me away I loved it so much.Exept I didn’t realy understand the bit were you said i’m still young into my house but apart from that it was amazing.
Keep blogging
Hi Niyusha, this is quite a good story. However, some words were repeated and some sentences didn’t make sence which made it hard to read. Otherwise, it was good and I liked the last sentence despite there being a lack of comma and speech marks. Keep blogging because I want a sequel…
Hey Niysha Sophie here
Your story blew me away I loved it so much.Exept I didn’t realy understand the bit were you said i’m still young into my house but apart from that it was amazing.
Keep blogging