I really liked reading your diary entry, I was particularly impressed by the way you wrote to the diary as if it was a real person. You showed this by calling it ‘you’. I also loved the way you started by writing ‘Dear shredded, ripped diary’ to show what your brother had done! I think you have a fantastic writing style and some really creative ideas. You remind me of my favourite author Jaqueline Wilson.
Who is your favourite author? Why do you like them so much?
Thank you so much for commenting on my blog. Like you I did like the beggining sentence of my diary!My favourite author is J.K Rowling because she describes stuff well and has a amazing ideas and is very imaginative!But why do you like Jagueline Wilson so much?And what is your favourite book by her?
Hi Merly, I think you are right about that but i think it workes with sisters, like my sister, to do you think so?
My sister is always going on about how cool she is when realy shes acting like a complet idiot.
I realy liked how tuethfull you were.
Hi Merley,
I really liked your diary entry because you included some great words like shredded and terrible. I also agree with you, once my brother scribbled all over my book! Do you have a diary?
Great work merley 🙂
Merley i totaly agree brothers are annoying!!!! I like your diary entry especialy the way you entered it.My little brother is always saying how cool he is and how he can add 1+1. why did you enter your diary the way you did?
Hi Merley,
I hope your brother didn’t really rip your diary. If he did I suggest you hide it. You discribe your anger well and you keep one emotion all the way through which really pulls the reader in. I don’t have a brother so I wouldn’t know but I you make me pity you. (A good writer does that) I like your metaphor ‘Dirty Rats’ Well done for your hard work.
I think this work is great. I loved the you wrote dear shredded, ripped diary instead of just dear diary. it gives a sense of an angry, annoyed atmosphere. you listed all the annoying points about brothers in a simple yet understandable way.
you have included some great adjectives, but do you think next time you could include some points about why brothers may be good?
Keep up the good work!
Merle that is halairious. i can picure you with steam coming out of your ears as you wrote this! There have been many times when my brother annoyed me too!thought it was pure comedy when you said boys were LITTLE DIRTY RATS! and when you said they were 100% terrible.However I think you went slightly over the top andyou could have said something like ….”I know I said he was ok on holiday but trust me he isn’t!!!!!!……”( just an example)
Did your brother acctualy do something to infuriate you or did you just decide it was a good topic?
Hi Merley,
I really liked reading your diary entry, I was particularly impressed by the way you wrote to the diary as if it was a real person. You showed this by calling it ‘you’. I also loved the way you started by writing ‘Dear shredded, ripped diary’ to show what your brother had done! I think you have a fantastic writing style and some really creative ideas. You remind me of my favourite author Jaqueline Wilson.
Who is your favourite author? Why do you like them so much?
Abigail
Thank you so much for commenting on my blog. Like you I did like the beggining sentence of my diary!My favourite author is J.K Rowling because she describes stuff well and has a amazing ideas and is very imaginative!But why do you like Jagueline Wilson so much?And what is your favourite book by her?
Hi Merly, I think you are right about that but i think it workes with sisters, like my sister, to do you think so?
My sister is always going on about how cool she is when realy shes acting like a complet idiot.
I realy liked how tuethfull you were.
Hi Merley,
I really liked your diary entry because you included some great words like shredded and terrible. I also agree with you, once my brother scribbled all over my book! Do you have a diary?
Great work merley 🙂
Hope
Merley i totaly agree brothers are annoying!!!! I like your diary entry especialy the way you entered it.My little brother is always saying how cool he is and how he can add 1+1. why did you enter your diary the way you did?
Hi Merley,
I hope your brother didn’t really rip your diary. If he did I suggest you hide it. You discribe your anger well and you keep one emotion all the way through which really pulls the reader in. I don’t have a brother so I wouldn’t know but I you make me pity you. (A good writer does that) I like your metaphor ‘Dirty Rats’ Well done for your hard work.
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I found it really funny and you included great words. Well done
Hi merley, I really like how you wrote “LITTLE DIRTY RATS!” because that emphasises how you feel!
Just to add to my comment, did this ever happene to you? Who did he rip?
Hi Merley,
I think this work is great. I loved the you wrote dear shredded, ripped diary instead of just dear diary. it gives a sense of an angry, annoyed atmosphere. you listed all the annoying points about brothers in a simple yet understandable way.
you have included some great adjectives, but do you think next time you could include some points about why brothers may be good?
Keep up the good work!
Merle that is halairious. i can picure you with steam coming out of your ears as you wrote this! There have been many times when my brother annoyed me too!thought it was pure comedy when you said boys were LITTLE DIRTY RATS! and when you said they were 100% terrible.However I think you went slightly over the top andyou could have said something like ….”I know I said he was ok on holiday but trust me he isn’t!!!!!!……”( just an example)
Did your brother acctualy do something to infuriate you or did you just decide it was a good topic?