Hi Zoe – well done for your 100wc this week – you managed to pack in so much action into your 100 words! I’m particularly impressed with the range of exciting and interesting words you used, such as mysterious, slaughtered, wild and flung.
You also grab the reader’s attention by using a question near the beginning of your story – an excellent way to make the reader feel like they are a part of the story.
To improve even more, make sure that you always re-read your typed work – can you spot any capital letters or pieces of punctuation that are missing?
Wow this is so good and Ilike the way you have put lots of wow words in your story but you could put in more commers and well done keep it up.
Hi Zoe – well done for your 100wc this week – you managed to pack in so much action into your 100 words! I’m particularly impressed with the range of exciting and interesting words you used, such as mysterious, slaughtered, wild and flung.
You also grab the reader’s attention by using a question near the beginning of your story – an excellent way to make the reader feel like they are a part of the story.
To improve even more, make sure that you always re-read your typed work – can you spot any capital letters or pieces of punctuation that are missing?
A super 100wc – I’m already looking forward to your next one!
Mr K 🙂
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