Hi Can
Here are a few good things you already have in your story and a few things that could be improved;
1. What a story!
2. You have a flabergasting imagination
Improvments;
1. Make sure you always use a capital after a full stop and remember to check your work for spelling mistakes.
Wow, Can. I see you have put a lot of effort into this post. The words were incredible, the punctuation as mighty as a lion’s roar. Here are some improvements however.
1. Some punctuation is not as good as I thought it would be. Capitals have been left out and commas have been left out as an occasional substance. Try and check your work next time.
2. You do not need to write ‘very very’ since it is not that relevant.
3. When you are writing your blog, check if you have a red squiggly line underneatha spelling and change the spelling. For example, ‘mithical’ is spelt ‘mythical’.
Hope you can change quickly so you can get more comments!
Hi Can
Here are a few good things you already have in your story and a few things that could be improved;
1. What a story!
2. You have a flabergasting imagination
Improvments;
1. Make sure you always use a capital after a full stop and remember to check your work for spelling mistakes.
Well done though!
Wow, Can. I see you have put a lot of effort into this post. The words were incredible, the punctuation as mighty as a lion’s roar. Here are some improvements however.
1. Some punctuation is not as good as I thought it would be. Capitals have been left out and commas have been left out as an occasional substance. Try and check your work next time.
2. You do not need to write ‘very very’ since it is not that relevant.
3. When you are writing your blog, check if you have a red squiggly line underneatha spelling and change the spelling. For example, ‘mithical’ is spelt ‘mythical’.
Hope you can change quickly so you can get more comments!
Can
You used some excellent words and I can’t wait to read more of your brilliant stories
Hi can
Brilliant piece of work , and I can’t wait to read more of your work.
From liam