Well done Liam. What great imagination. I really liked your description of the bat. Hopefully he won’t come to live in the rafters of our house! You need to work on using a few more full stops.
Liam, I’m sure the Night Zoo Keeper would be delighted to have your bat in his zoo. You’ve described the bat very clearly, so I can imagine it in my mind. I also like the way you started your writing, you didn’t immediately introduce the bat, which made me want to keep reading. As your mum says, you have missed a couple of full stops, including the one at the very end.
Super writing and thank-you for entering the 100 Word Challenge.
Well done Liam. What great imagination. I really liked your description of the bat. Hopefully he won’t come to live in the rafters of our house! You need to work on using a few more full stops.
Mum
Liam, I’m sure the Night Zoo Keeper would be delighted to have your bat in his zoo. You’ve described the bat very clearly, so I can imagine it in my mind. I also like the way you started your writing, you didn’t immediately introduce the bat, which made me want to keep reading. As your mum says, you have missed a couple of full stops, including the one at the very end.
Super writing and thank-you for entering the 100 Word Challenge.
Mrs Stones
You described the bat you found very well, good job!
Thank you for commenting on my work it ws really nice of you