Well done Theo. I loved your descriptive sentences. I especially liked it when you said ‘His massive mouth was filled with teeth the size of pencils’. Also the 2nd last sentence. I know some info on the crocodiles, they can reach up to 15 feet long! Why did you chose to write about a crocodile? Just remember that instead of the A there is an O in the title on the word crocodile and remember in the first sentence there is a capital I. But good work.
Theo, I love the bit about gliding swiftly down a stream “out of sight”. It makes you worry about some poor animal taking a rest in the heat of the day standing close to the dark reflection from the palm tree,… and then suddenly….. “SNAP”!
Henry
Well done Theo. I loved your descriptive sentences. I especially liked it when you said ‘His massive mouth was filled with teeth the size of pencils’. Also the 2nd last sentence. I know some info on the crocodiles, they can reach up to 15 feet long! Why did you chose to write about a crocodile? Just remember that instead of the A there is an O in the title on the word crocodile and remember in the first sentence there is a capital I. But good work.
Wow amazing I wish I could write like you, your description,organisation,punctuation and grammar.I like the bit that you wrote fly like a arrow!
Theo, I love the bit about gliding swiftly down a stream “out of sight”. It makes you worry about some poor animal taking a rest in the heat of the day standing close to the dark reflection from the palm tree,… and then suddenly….. “SNAP”!
Henry
To Joel,
Thank you so much for your kind words. I enjoy all of blogs, you always have nice things to say.