What a perfect way to put the story. It reminded me of when I went to my Nanna’s party but the dress I wanted didn’t fit so I had to wear a pink one insted!! Maybe you could have highlighted the words you had to include but it’s no biggy. Have you ever been a bridsmaid????
Hello Anna. I really enjoyed reading this as you described your excitement at being a bridesmaid so well – from your thoughts about the dress to practising your moves for the disco. I would have loved you to describe the dress of your dreams a bit more – was it straight or swishy, lacy or sparkly?
Hello Anna. What an original use of the prompt. Well done. I especially like some of your phrases, “In a moment of wonder…” and “carefully prized…” Excellent use of language.
Keep writing!
What a perfect way to put the story. It reminded me of when I went to my Nanna’s party but the dress I wanted didn’t fit so I had to wear a pink one insted!! Maybe you could have highlighted the words you had to include but it’s no biggy. Have you ever been a bridsmaid????
Yes , I have but I was only young so I don’t remember it very well.
Hello Anna. I really enjoyed reading this as you described your excitement at being a bridesmaid so well – from your thoughts about the dress to practising your moves for the disco. I would have loved you to describe the dress of your dreams a bit more – was it straight or swishy, lacy or sparkly?
Hello Anna. What an original use of the prompt. Well done. I especially like some of your phrases, “In a moment of wonder…” and “carefully prized…” Excellent use of language.
Keep writing!