Grace I love this post! Your description is brilliant and I hope you do another part to your story. There is nothing to criticize but maybe next time you could use a semi colon or a dash. I really enjoyed reading this post – it hooked me in. 🙂
Hi Grace – what a fantastically-imaginative 100wc! I agree with Lucy – I really hope that you continue this story: I’m dying to find out what was written in the note! I’d also love to know why the aunt was so disgusting! I’ll keep my fingers crossed for a sequel!
Mr K 🙂 http://www.ashclassgreenfields.blogspot.com
Wow what a good gripping story . I do hope you write a sequel on this . I liked your story because
1 .You used some amazing wow words /adjectives
2. You used your punctuation well
3.You did a good cliffhanger and ended that piece well
Well done grace keep up the good work
happy blogging .Next time pop in a simile or metaphor to spice the story up even more .
Grace I love this post! Your description is brilliant and I hope you do another part to your story. There is nothing to criticize but maybe next time you could use a semi colon or a dash. I really enjoyed reading this post – it hooked me in. 🙂
Hi Grace – what a fantastically-imaginative 100wc! I agree with Lucy – I really hope that you continue this story: I’m dying to find out what was written in the note! I’d also love to know why the aunt was so disgusting! I’ll keep my fingers crossed for a sequel!
Mr K 🙂
http://www.ashclassgreenfields.blogspot.com
Wow what a good gripping story . I do hope you write a sequel on this . I liked your story because
1 .You used some amazing wow words /adjectives
2. You used your punctuation well
3.You did a good cliffhanger and ended that piece well
Well done grace keep up the good work
happy blogging .Next time pop in a simile or metaphor to spice the story up even more .