Hello Jake, this is a very deep piece of writing for the 100WC. I wonder what had happened to cause him so much unhappiness?
It was an excellent way to use the prompt and quite unlike any others that I have read. I guess that you read quite a lot to have such a vivid imagination. Well done. Chilling, but a great piece 🙂
WOW Jake this is awsome i loved the name Bye world it is cool.
Only one little thing you could of improved.The thing you could improve is to put more conectives and punctuation in your 100wc.
Hello Jake,
Well done for taking part in the 100WC. Good use of VCOP throughout your writing and it is a piece of writing that really stays with the reader. Keep up the good work.
Hello Jake, this is a very deep piece of writing for the 100WC. I wonder what had happened to cause him so much unhappiness?
It was an excellent way to use the prompt and quite unlike any others that I have read. I guess that you read quite a lot to have such a vivid imagination. Well done. Chilling, but a great piece 🙂
very good
WOW Jake this is awsome i loved the name Bye world it is cool.
Only one little thing you could of improved.The thing you could improve is to put more conectives and punctuation in your 100wc.
Hello Jake,
Well done for taking part in the 100WC. Good use of VCOP throughout your writing and it is a piece of writing that really stays with the reader. Keep up the good work.
Dear Jake,
What caused so much unhapiness. You used alot of good adjectives. I think you need to use more punctuation. You are very creative.