Hi Jamie,
Wow, what a fabulous story. You have really crammed a lot into your 100 words, well done! You included some great expressions which really painted the picture for me like “lit with glee”. There were a few small errors but I’m sure that if you carry on with your reading and writing you will iron these out. For example, the spelling of crimson is with a s not a z.
You have a great imagination so keep up your writing!
Well Tara T, I did enjoy writing this piece of work.Writing the imagination is fascinating with what you can do! but liz Goddard is right i did make some spelling mistakes though,but on the front it was fun ^__^
Hi Jamie,
Wow, what a fabulous story. You have really crammed a lot into your 100 words, well done! You included some great expressions which really painted the picture for me like “lit with glee”. There were a few small errors but I’m sure that if you carry on with your reading and writing you will iron these out. For example, the spelling of crimson is with a s not a z.
You have a great imagination so keep up your writing!
I like your amazing,powerful Wow words it wonderful!I love the last bit with the ………. Can I ask you any questions did you enjoy writing the 100wc?
Hi Jamie,
What a wonderful story! You have a lot of wow words! I like the way that you end the story with an elipse. What inspired you?
Well Tara T, I did enjoy writing this piece of work.Writing the imagination is fascinating with what you can do! but liz Goddard is right i did make some spelling mistakes though,but on the front it was fun ^__^
I like your adjectives jamie from Alfie