100 wc-Paradise

Posted on May 18, 2012 by Deleted User
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1 Response to 100 wc-Paradise

  1. Sally-Jayne (Team 100WC) says:
    May 21, 2012 at 1:45 pm

    Hi Louis. What a beautiful description – it sounds like my idea of paradise too. You have used personification really well in this piece. Have a look now at your sentence openers – do you think you could vary them?

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