What a super 100wc, so full of wonderful ideas and how exciting to find a key that unlocks the door to your dreams! Such a find could certainly lead to many possibilities and new storylines. Your writing helped me create a wonderful image in my mind of the fantastic sight that Tim and Moby discovered, and the introduction of a new mysterious and rather menacing character at the end is particularly effective.
To make an improvement remember to read through all your sentences and check that you have included all the punctuation required.
Thank you for sharing your fabulous work with the 100wc, I look forward to reading many more of your stories in the future so remember to keep entering.
Hello Elena,
What a super 100wc, so full of wonderful ideas and how exciting to find a key that unlocks the door to your dreams! Such a find could certainly lead to many possibilities and new storylines. Your writing helped me create a wonderful image in my mind of the fantastic sight that Tim and Moby discovered, and the introduction of a new mysterious and rather menacing character at the end is particularly effective.
To make an improvement remember to read through all your sentences and check that you have included all the punctuation required.
Thank you for sharing your fabulous work with the 100wc, I look forward to reading many more of your stories in the future so remember to keep entering.
Mrs Shaw (Team 100wc)