Hi Liam – what an exciting story you have created with your 100 words! The chase really grabs your readers’ attention. One thing I would try is to not try to cram a whole story into the 100 words – use it instead to include lots of great description!
Mr K 🙂 http://www.ashclassgreenfields.blogspot.com
Hi,
That is a really good story it is good too read because it is a really sad and happy story.
From Angela and The Smarties.
That was really interesting I liked it.
Love Seth and the smarties
I loved how you tried so hard to make a story like this
Hi Liam – what an exciting story you have created with your 100 words! The chase really grabs your readers’ attention. One thing I would try is to not try to cram a whole story into the 100 words – use it instead to include lots of great description!
Mr K 🙂
http://www.ashclassgreenfields.blogspot.com