100 wc week 32

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  1. Ms Woodgate(Team 100WC) says:

    Hello Raphael,
    This is a very persuasive piece of writing for this week’s 100WC. You jumped straight in and were very convincing, with brilliant snappy sentences. It is worth thinking about using puncuation more, a comma here and there would help your writing flow a little better also think about using rhetorical questions too.
    Great work and keep it up.

  2. Mrs Halford Team 100 WC says:

    Hello Raphael,
    This would certainly help people to understand about the 100WC. You gave lots of positive comments about it and used repetition to make sure that the reader knows what it is about.
    To make your writing even more effective, vary sentence lengths and include a greater range of punctuation. Rhetorical questions and daring the reader to disagree are very powerful persuasion tools 🙂 Keep on blogging.

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