Hi luca,
I thought it was a brilliant piece of writing! It has a good pace.I like the way that he tells the story like somone breathlessly telling it.The only time it seems slightly clumsy is when he repeats amulet three times.Well done keep the good witing up!
Hi luca,
I thought it was a brilliant piece of writing! It has a good pace.I like the way that he tells the story like somone breathlessly telling it.The only time it seems slightly clumsy is when he repeats amulet three times.Well done keep the good witing up!
HI Luca this is very good but why are you doing so many free running.
Theo y5 drew
I enjoyed reading it was just like cass said clumsy when you used amulet 3 times,
but despite that I really enjoyed it
Sophie K 🙂