Hello Daniel,
Really good description, i liked the bit on the trees falling down it was really good but you could improve on some similies.
Thanks Thomas, I will try and do simillies next time I will try and keep the rest of my writing the same so my writing will be better
Hi Daniel Great dscription about why you chose green. You could of used a comma after jungles next time.
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Hello Daniel,
Really good description, i liked the bit on the trees falling down it was really good but you could improve on some similies.
Thanks Thomas,
I will try and do simillies next time I will try and keep the rest of my writing the same so my writing will be better
Hi Daniel
Great dscription about why you chose green. You could of used a comma after jungles next time.