Well done Liam, I really liked your piece of work but there are a few things that you should improve on
1.’Tom’ is meant to be a capital letter not ‘tom’
2. You spelt your title wrong when it is meant to be Diamonds and Jewels.
3. I’m not sure if I said it or not, but ‘i’ is meant to be a capital
so maybe you should check your work before you blog but otherwise,Well done
Hello Liam,
Here is what I really liked about your story:
1. It had a great story line.
2. You used some great time words.
However, in your next blog you might want to improve on:
1. Capitalising ‘I’
2. Start a new line if someone new is speaking.
3. If something belongs to somebody, use an apostrophe in their name, not a comma. For example: Instead of, Tom,s grandad was lovely. It should be, Tom’s grandad was lovely.
Apart from that everything was fine so keep up the good work and carry on blogging.
Well done Liam, I really liked your piece of work but there are a few things that you should improve on
1.’Tom’ is meant to be a capital letter not ‘tom’
2. You spelt your title wrong when it is meant to be Diamonds and Jewels.
3. I’m not sure if I said it or not, but ‘i’ is meant to be a capital
so maybe you should check your work before you blog but otherwise,Well done
Hello Liam,
Here is what I really liked about your story:
1. It had a great story line.
2. You used some great time words.
However, in your next blog you might want to improve on:
1. Capitalising ‘I’
2. Start a new line if someone new is speaking.
3. If something belongs to somebody, use an apostrophe in their name, not a comma. For example: Instead of, Tom,s grandad was lovely. It should be, Tom’s grandad was lovely.
Apart from that everything was fine so keep up the good work and carry on blogging.