Cass I really like how you made the characters speak by putting a decribing word at the end. Just remember your spellings.
I dont know if you were trying to say how cares but if you weren’t shouldn’t it be who cares. I like how you left it with a clif hanger I would love to read what happens next.
Sophie K
Hi, Cassady your story is very good, however i think that you need to spilt your story into paragraphs.
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Cass
I really like how you made the characters speak by putting a decribing word at the end.
Just remember your spellings.
I dont know if you were trying to say how cares but if you weren’t shouldn’t it be who cares.
I like how you left it with a clif hanger I would love to read what happens next.
Sophie K
Hi, Cassady
your story is very good, however i think that you need to spilt your story into paragraphs.
from Ebenezer