Really good Description and you used a lot of good words but you missed out a capital letter and spelt possibly rong when it said “could it posibly be the key”.
Brilliant story, i’m impressed by all the amazing adjectives. However, you did some little mistakes like the girls name “Elana”, then you wrote it “Ellena”. But it’s Amazing.
Good luck for your other stories and i am delighted to read more.
Amazing story,I love all of the adjectives you used in your writing ,but I think you fogot to put in a capital letter and one more mistake but the rest were fabulous at start of the story you put Elena after it turned into Ellena .further one just mindblowing .If you would like to reply go on http://crowland-primary-school.j2webby.com/?cat=6.
Great adventurous story Cassandy, I liked when you used the adjective ‘glint’ and ‘silver’. You can improve on reading your work before you blog to correct any small mistakes.
Hi Cass,
Really good Description and you used a lot of good words but you missed out a capital letter and spelt possibly rong when it said “could it posibly be the key”.
hi Cassady,
Brilliant story, i’m impressed by all the amazing adjectives. However, you did some little mistakes like the girls name “Elana”, then you wrote it “Ellena”. But it’s Amazing.
Good luck for your other stories and i am delighted to read more.
Callista.
Hi cassady,
Amazing story,I love all of the adjectives you used in your writing ,but I think you fogot to put in a capital letter and one more mistake but the rest were fabulous at start of the story you put Elena after it turned into Ellena .further one just mindblowing .If you would like to reply go on http://crowland-primary-school.j2webby.com/?cat=6.
Hi Cassandy,
Great adventurous story Cassandy, I liked when you used the adjective ‘glint’ and ‘silver’. You can improve on reading your work before you blog to correct any small mistakes.
from Amalia and Tran.