Hey Dilan,I really enjoyed reading your poem about polar bears.I think it was fabulous the way you made water hater ryhme with ice skater.I love polar bears and ice skating.Do you like ice skating?
Hi Dilan,
Your poem is great.I like how you have followed the AABBAABB rhyming patern to form your poem,however I am not shore that polar bears hate water.
all in all I loved it,check out our blogging site at Crowland Primary School Blog.
Gabriel Y4
I really liked your poem, but i think you could have used hater and lover once and put a different rhyme instead check out our blogs http://www.crowland.haringey.sch.uk
Nice story, I really enjoyed it, because you were using powerful verbs. But it was a bit short, so i think you could have made it longer. However, it as really good. Why don’t you check out our website? http://crowland-primary-school.j2webby.com
Hey Dilan,I really enjoyed reading your poem about polar bears.I think it was fabulous the way you made water hater ryhme with ice skater.I love polar bears and ice skating.Do you like ice skating?
hi dilan
I love it it was fun ryming but thers just one thing rong polar bears dont hate water.
amazing come and see crowlands blog
shane
Hi Dilan,
great style of poem.But are you sure that polar bears hate water and maybe you could use different rhyming words.But it’s cool
Hi Dilan,
Your poem is great.I like how you have followed the AABBAABB rhyming patern to form your poem,however I am not shore that polar bears hate water.
all in all I loved it,check out our blogging site at Crowland Primary School Blog.
Gabriel Y4
dilan,
that was a fantastic poem!!
Hi Dilan,
I really liked your poem, but i think you could have used hater and lover once and put a different rhyme instead check out our blogs http://www.crowland.haringey.sch.uk
hey Dilan
I like your aliteration nice pieace of writeing
Hi Dilan,
Nice story, I really enjoyed it, because you were using powerful verbs. But it was a bit short, so i think you could have made it longer. However, it as really good. Why don’t you check out our website?
http://crowland-primary-school.j2webby.com
Callista.