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Hi it was really exiting, there were a lot of strong adjectives. you described the story really well and it made me feel like it was coming true. I am really desperate to hear the rest of the story. What a stunning piece of work I really like it. If that happened in real life that would be terrifying, how did you come up with that amazing storyline?
I really like your use of building up suspense. Your spelling and punctuation are really well done, and I agree with the commenter above that I want to hear more!