Hi Alfie, Thanks for writing a brilliant entry for this week’s 100WC. I like how you’ve chosen to use the 100WC prompt near to the end of your blog post. You should have used a comma instead of a full stop after the speech as ‘wailed the lady’ is part of the same sentence because it is who said it. You have written a really clever short story with a good twist at the end. Keep it up!
Good work, Alfie. I really enjoyed this 100WC entry. Super description – I could really feel the atmosphere. You drew me right into the story, then left me hanging at the end! ‘A wave of black’ is excellent!!
Hi Alfie – that was really an amazing, imaginery story. I really felt the atmosphere in that room, and what a great ending – maybe there is a light at the end of the tunnel and we all attend our own funeral!
Hi Alfie, Thanks for writing a brilliant entry for this week’s 100WC. I like how you’ve chosen to use the 100WC prompt near to the end of your blog post. You should have used a comma instead of a full stop after the speech as ‘wailed the lady’ is part of the same sentence because it is who said it. You have written a really clever short story with a good twist at the end. Keep it up!
Good work, Alfie. I really enjoyed this 100WC entry. Super description – I could really feel the atmosphere. You drew me right into the story, then left me hanging at the end! ‘A wave of black’ is excellent!!
Hi Alfie – that was really an amazing, imaginery story. I really felt the atmosphere in that room, and what a great ending – maybe there is a light at the end of the tunnel and we all attend our own funeral!