Hi Louis, I thought it was a really good story it had the right punctuation and the word”spurted” I thought was mind blowing and I really liked it and I did really love it
I agree with Alex it was really mind blowing your amazing description!Some really good laungage aswell!
I really think you should carry on. Dont you?
Also like alex I really loved it!
WOW louis, what a fantastic piece of writing. Your description is horrifyingly good at creating an image in my head of what you are suffering! I’m so relieved that it ended when they switched the simulation off – what was it preparing you for I wonder?
You have a great range of descriptive words such as ‘menacing’ and ‘ venomous pins puncturing through to your bones’
I look forward to reading future posts, Mrs Ratcliffe
Hi Louis, I thought it was a really good story it had the right punctuation and the word”spurted” I thought was mind blowing and I really liked it and I did really love it
I agree with Alex it was really mind blowing your amazing description!Some really good laungage aswell!
I really think you should carry on. Dont you?
Also like alex I really loved it!
WOW louis, what a fantastic piece of writing. Your description is horrifyingly good at creating an image in my head of what you are suffering! I’m so relieved that it ended when they switched the simulation off – what was it preparing you for I wonder?
You have a great range of descriptive words such as ‘menacing’ and ‘ venomous pins puncturing through to your bones’
I look forward to reading future posts, Mrs Ratcliffe