Hello Alfie, this 100WC sounds like the start of a very exciting story; I hope you continue it. How did you know that it was a portal? Keep on writing 🙂
Hi Alfie. I really enjoyed reading your 100WC. You have written a very exciting story with good use of punctuation, adverbs and adjectives. Just try to remember to start a new line when the speaker changes. Great writing!
Hi Alfie – what a fantastic 100wc entry! Like everyone else, I’m dying to know what happens next…
You used some super language here – really descriptive. Take another look at your speech punctuation – remember you still need things like a comma or full stop at the end of speech.
I can’t wait for your next 100wc entry!
Hello Alfie, this 100WC sounds like the start of a very exciting story; I hope you continue it. How did you know that it was a portal? Keep on writing 🙂
I agree. I think it could become a real story with a few more pages.
Hi Alfie. I really enjoyed reading your 100WC. You have written a very exciting story with good use of punctuation, adverbs and adjectives. Just try to remember to start a new line when the speaker changes. Great writing!
Hi Alfie – what a fantastic 100wc entry! Like everyone else, I’m dying to know what happens next…
You used some super language here – really descriptive. Take another look at your speech punctuation – remember you still need things like a comma or full stop at the end of speech.
I can’t wait for your next 100wc entry!
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