The race

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  1. lulu says:

    Where you telling the story in a different persons eye because it did not sound clear to me. There where a lot of spelling mistakes in your work so it was hard to read ,You wrote ” (our school rose merry school)” it sounds like our school is rose merry school you could have said “our school Tetherdown and rose merry school” “After that we Kept winning every race our school was the winners” you wrote our school WAS the winners but our school came in third place and instead of saying WAS the winners you should have wrote our school WERE the winners.I hope that will help your writing better.

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