I like the way you open with a question Louis. This draws the reader in to find out how you will answer it. I like your closing sentence too, the rhyme makes it punchy, and it makes a really good point too. At school we learn lots of things, including how we can work together!
Louis, this a terrific example of 100WC. I appreciated your word choices, especially words like speculated, and the way you worked your theme back in at the end. Your writing is much more sophisticated than your peers — I’ll keep an eye out every week, hopefully to catch more of your writing. Bravo, young man!
Hello Louis,
I found this blog quite confusing as it didn’t really tell me why school is essential. However, you did input about how we do have loads of things that other countries don’t and that we do take a lot of things for granted. Maybe, if you did another blog about essential education, you can input about how you can help other children get the opportunity to go to school. Apart from those small mistakes your blog was very good and probably will get showcased this week! 🙂 !
I like the way you open with a question Louis. This draws the reader in to find out how you will answer it. I like your closing sentence too, the rhyme makes it punchy, and it makes a really good point too. At school we learn lots of things, including how we can work together!
Louis! Sorry, I misread your name!
Louis, this a terrific example of 100WC. I appreciated your word choices, especially words like speculated, and the way you worked your theme back in at the end. Your writing is much more sophisticated than your peers — I’ll keep an eye out every week, hopefully to catch more of your writing. Bravo, young man!
Hello Louis,
I found this blog quite confusing as it didn’t really tell me why school is essential. However, you did input about how we do have loads of things that other countries don’t and that we do take a lot of things for granted. Maybe, if you did another blog about essential education, you can input about how you can help other children get the opportunity to go to school. Apart from those small mistakes your blog was very good and probably will get showcased this week! 🙂 !