Hi Alfie,
I think was very good however you made a couple of grammatical mistakes. Also Igintor is from Skylanders. Apart from that it was really good so well done.
From Rafi.
dear Rafi
thank you for your comments.
I know ignitor is from skylanders it is a bit obvious and i wanted to combine the two worlds of skylanders and star wars together. from alfie
Good you make emperor Palpatine the real atmosphere of a villan but you used crooked a lot and you could of described “ignitor” a bit more, never the less good.
Its very good Alfie. So gripping. I think the story ended a bit quickly but otherwise I cant wait for the rest.
🙂
Hi Alfie,
I think was very good however you made a couple of grammatical mistakes. Also Igintor is from Skylanders. Apart from that it was really good so well done.
From Rafi.
dear Rafi
thank you for your comments.
I know ignitor is from skylanders it is a bit obvious and i wanted to combine the two worlds of skylanders and star wars together. from alfie
We think it was a very creative piece of writing and funny
Good you make emperor Palpatine the real atmosphere of a villan but you used crooked a lot and you could of described “ignitor” a bit more, never the less good.
-Jamie
thank you jamie thank you for your the very nice comment i liked it a lot from alfie
It has good description and you have good imagination. It has a good story line.You should sheck your spelling first though.
very good I like the start but there are spelling mistakes
Yoda was a Republican? I’d say a Democrat he is. Great story though Alfie!
Andy (Jamie’s dad).