Yours is really good but you wrote: “Thinking They are so tall I bet I came not get past them
I am getting past them” it doesn’t make any sense. instead of saying “They say my name wrong” you could have wrote they (SAID) my name wrong and you forgot to add full stop at the end. If you had these corrections your work would be so exiting to read.
Yours is really good but you wrote: “Thinking They are so tall I bet I came not get past them
I am getting past them” it doesn’t make any sense. instead of saying “They say my name wrong” you could have wrote they (SAID) my name wrong and you forgot to add full stop at the end. If you had these corrections your work would be so exiting to read.