The turtle’s home

4 Responses to The turtle’s home

1. Ella says:

   July 4, 2012 at 5:41 pm

   Hello Laila,
   I think your poem is set out really cleverly.
   I liked the way you said the turtle could not selll his house or rent it.
   However you didn’t finish off with a linewhich had 3/4 words.
   Why did you decide to write about a turtle?
   Well Done,
   Ella
2. Ella says:

   July 4, 2012 at 5:42 pm

   Hello Laila,
   I think your poem is set out really cleverly.
   I liked the way you said the turtle could not selll his house or rent it.
   However you didn’t finish off with a linewhich had 2/3 words.
   Why did you decide to write about a turtle?
   Well Done,
   Ella
3. Harry says:

   July 4, 2012 at 7:37 pm

   Hi Laila it’s Harry .

   I like your rhyming and your descriptive writing but you could of done 2/3 words at the end.

   see ya
4. Raphael says:

   July 4, 2012 at 7:41 pm

   Hi Laila,
   I really like this poem especially how clever it was.The only mistake was you missed out a couple of commas,otherwise really good.
   Raphael.

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