Hi Louis,
This was definitely a well thought through piece of writing as I felt like I was being transported to the setting your 100 word challenge was based in. I could almost hear the chants and screams of supporters bellowing out of the audience. Your vivid description really does make your work a pleasure to read. However, sometimes too much description can have less of an effect as short but snappy adjectives can. So maybe in the future you can work on that incredible description but shorten it down so it is not like a list of words. Apart from that, everything was up to standards and I can’t help but feel jealous because of how much people are going to love your post. Keep up the good work and always remember to blog, blog, BLOG!
What a lovely entry for the 100WC Louis. I really felt as though I was in the olympic stadium due to your fab description. I look forward to reading more of your posts in the future 🙂
Hi Louis,
This was definitely a well thought through piece of writing as I felt like I was being transported to the setting your 100 word challenge was based in. I could almost hear the chants and screams of supporters bellowing out of the audience. Your vivid description really does make your work a pleasure to read. However, sometimes too much description can have less of an effect as short but snappy adjectives can. So maybe in the future you can work on that incredible description but shorten it down so it is not like a list of words. Apart from that, everything was up to standards and I can’t help but feel jealous because of how much people are going to love your post. Keep up the good work and always remember to blog, blog, BLOG!
What a lovely entry for the 100WC Louis. I really felt as though I was in the olympic stadium due to your fab description. I look forward to reading more of your posts in the future 🙂