the virus

6 Responses to the virus

1. IsabellaI says:

   November 5, 2012 at 11:17 am

   Hi Louis B,
   I really like your story, you thought of lots of words for ‘said’ and a re4ally good everyday enviroment that turns into a great story.
   Next time remember where to put capital letters.
   Isabella
2. Charlie says:

   November 5, 2012 at 11:18 am

   Hey louis,
   I really like your piece of work it made me laugh but you should of used some more description.
   From charlie
3. Alexander says:

   November 5, 2012 at 11:20 am

   Hey Louis,
   great piece of work but you could of used more fullstops.
   Alexander
4. Ella M says:

   November 5, 2012 at 11:22 am

   Hi Louis B
   Your writing is realy good and I like your use of bold on the computer but ‘ you’ ve won a ipad ‘ does not make sense.
   From Ella M
5. Mrs Cohen says:

   November 5, 2012 at 11:30 am

   Hi Louis, what a suspenseful 100wc.
   I was a bit confused whether this was a computer game or happening in ‘real lfe’. How could you make it more clear to the reader?
   Well done for using speech marks correctly 🙂
6. Hal says:

   November 5, 2012 at 12:01 pm

   Hi Louis,
   Yor writting was Exilent but try to make more sense next time:)

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