Hi Jessica,
Great piece of work! Your use of language is brilliant and, due to
your good descriptions, every part in your story I can see a wonderful
picture in my mind of your story. Good Work!
Very good jessica,
*I really like your adjectives, E.G:intoned,proccesing and squalling
*You have used great punctuation
WISH:I can’t think of anything
You have used some powerful vocabulary. I especially like the words “intoned” and “squalling”. Check those speech marks carefully! 🙂
Hi Jessica,
I really like your work,
It was very creative,
it was very interesting and it gave a great idea of what was going on,
well done 🙂
Hi Jessica,
Great piece of work! Your use of language is brilliant and, due to
your good descriptions, every part in your story I can see a wonderful
picture in my mind of your story. Good Work!
I like it good work keep it up
Very good jessica,
*I really like your adjectives, E.G:intoned,proccesing and squalling
*You have used great punctuation
WISH:I can’t think of anything
Wow Jessica! I love the vocabulary.Also you have used some very strong description which I like.