Hi Sophie, I really liked that story! At the beginning it made me wonder what was inside the bag. It also built up suspense when the bag got stolen. Next time maby try and put in different connectives. Well Done!!!!!
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Hi Sophie,
I really liked that story! At the beginning it made me wonder what was
inside the bag. It also built up suspense when the bag got stolen. Next time
maby try and put in different connectives.
Well Done!!!!!