I really like how you shown that your life is different from Abasi’s life.
You’ve made a good point at the bottom about his sister. Where it says ‘ I am reading this story…’
There should be a because between ‘story and I’.
And your name needs a capital letter.
Well done on your paragraph’s.
Hi Lola,
That was a very good peice of work! You explained everything very well
and really showed how lucky we are to have water. Next time maby explaine
more about Abasi’s sister. Well Done!
I really liked your post on Abasi. You compared him to your casual life which really helped me understand about Abasi.
My only improvement is that you should put a comma after the word sister.
I really like how you shown that your life is different from Abasi’s life.
You’ve made a good point at the bottom about his sister. Where it says ‘ I am reading this story…’
There should be a because between ‘story and I’.
And your name needs a capital letter.
Well done on your paragraph’s.
Hi Lola,
That was a very good peice of work! You explained everything very well
and really showed how lucky we are to have water. Next time maby explaine
more about Abasi’s sister. Well Done!
Hi Lola.
I really liked your post on Abasi. You compared him to your casual life which really helped me understand about Abasi.
My only improvement is that you should put a comma after the word sister.
Keep up the great work!