The Acid Poo

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3 Responses to The Acid Poo

  1. Mrs Cohen says:

    One of the very important things we need to remember when writing is to consider our audience. I’m not sure that you have done that with this piece of writing. It is also important to check and edit your work carefully- can you spot your grammatical errors?

  2. nathalieD says:

    I liked your story because it had suspence and humor. I also liked the adverbs you put in. e.g “strolling”. However, my only improvement is that next time you write a piece maybe make it a bit more understandable.

  3. Rafi says:

    Hi Thomas,
    I enjoyed the plot behind the story and the comedy that was included inside the story as well. However, you made a few spelling mistakes. For example, ‘Probaly’ is spelt ‘Probably’ and in the terms you were using this word in… ‘of’ is spelt ‘off’. Apart from that I loved reading this and I would be pleased if you could write some more stories. Keep up the good work. Rafi :).

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