The world on its deathbed 100wc

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3 Responses to The world on its deathbed 100wc

  1. Ms Ashraf says:

    Wow Alex.. Very dramatic. Love the sense of smell.

  2. Ross Mannell (Team 100WC) says:

    Hello Alex,

    I see you enjoy post apocalyptic, final judgement, science fiction stories.

    John faces a choice. He can save the sun at the cost of his own life but, as the only survivor, who would inherit the Earth? Perhaps he hopes his sacrifice might bring back the dead and end the reign of evil. Well done. 🙂

    You have used wonderfully descriptive language in your entry. I particularly liked your phrase, “…ignoring the foul stench of carrion.” It evokes a sense of death lingering in the air.

    My suggestion might be to consider the length of your entry. I counted 175 words. The limit for this prompt was 105 words. I know it can be difficult to edit stories to the word limit but these challenges can give practise at being concise.

    Considering your skill in writing, I hope you have further opportunities to enter the 100WC.

    Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
    Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia

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