Hi Gabriella
WOW!!!!
Amazing writing it had so much description that I can even imagine in a book!
The first scentence was outstading as from reading it I wanted to carry on reading it!
What a wonderfully descriptive 100WC with a delightful opening Gabriella. You’ve chosen a rich variety of adjectives, adverbs and verbs, yet crafted them interestingly together into an intriguing story, told in the first person. I’m left wondering about Madam Corbett and what her relationship with the narrator is? It’s almost a bit Cinderella -ish! As with all good stories, you’ve left me wanting more!
One small thing to check – ‘saffires.’
Hi Gabriella
WOW!!!!
Amazing writing it had so much description that I can even imagine in a book!
The first scentence was outstading as from reading it I wanted to carry on reading it!
What a wonderfully descriptive 100WC with a delightful opening Gabriella. You’ve chosen a rich variety of adjectives, adverbs and verbs, yet crafted them interestingly together into an intriguing story, told in the first person. I’m left wondering about Madam Corbett and what her relationship with the narrator is? It’s almost a bit Cinderella -ish! As with all good stories, you’ve left me wanting more!
One small thing to check – ‘saffires.’