You’ve crafted a wonderful introduction Ben and have set the scene perfectly. With a vivid description of the surroundings, a simple statement of why Ben’s there (‘a stupid dare’), but most importantly by mentioning his foreboding, you’ve added a sense of tension. Finally we’re left desperate to know what was revealed as the doors parted. Love it!
Well done, what an excellent piece of writing
You’ve crafted a wonderful introduction Ben and have set the scene perfectly. With a vivid description of the surroundings, a simple statement of why Ben’s there (‘a stupid dare’), but most importantly by mentioning his foreboding, you’ve added a sense of tension. Finally we’re left desperate to know what was revealed as the doors parted. Love it!