To Isabel,
I like your use of all of your granpa’s storys instead of only one.
Also I lernt allot with your story witch is always good.
However in the last paragraphe I would like to learn a bit mour on your granpa Edward.
I really liked your peace of work about your great granddads, it was really interesting about your great granddad George when he shrapnel got stuck in his leg on a beach and they took it out when he came back to England.
Also
I really enjoyed reading your work and learning about your family’s jobs. You used your capital letters really well and put all your commas in the right palces. The only thing you could maybe do next time is name some of the houses that were bombed.
To Isabel,
I like your use of all of your granpa’s storys instead of only one.
Also I lernt allot with your story witch is always good.
However in the last paragraphe I would like to learn a bit mour on your granpa Edward.
I really liked your peace of work about your great granddads, it was really interesting about your great granddad George when he shrapnel got stuck in his leg on a beach and they took it out when he came back to England.
Also
I really enjoyed reading your work and learning about your family’s jobs. You used your capital letters really well and put all your commas in the right palces. The only thing you could maybe do next time is name some of the houses that were bombed.