Hi Mia, that was a great piece of work with lots of emotion and empathy. You really captured their pain and sadness. Also you used phrases like ‘soon we will bring help for you’ which would give them hope. Sometimes, though, you might want to check your spelling. ‘Tough, maybe and lonely, we’re spelt wrong. However all in all well done on an amazing piece of work!
What a heart felt message . Mia obviously has the ability to empathise and has been saddened by the awful happenings in the Phillipines . Full stops used often and appropriately.Please. Some more blogs as they are all so interesting.
Hi Mia
Great writing I loved reading it. It was very persuasive and encouraging plus had full stops in all the right places. You had a wide variety of sentence openers at the beginning which made it very interesting for the reader. There were a few spelling mistakes so you might want to check those but apart from that it was perfect, I can’t wait to read more pieces of your work.
hi Mia,
I realy like your post. I like how you interact with the child from the philippines, and how you make them feel better.
Hi Mia, that was a great piece of work with lots of emotion and empathy. You really captured their pain and sadness. Also you used phrases like ‘soon we will bring help for you’ which would give them hope. Sometimes, though, you might want to check your spelling. ‘Tough, maybe and lonely, we’re spelt wrong. However all in all well done on an amazing piece of work!
From Alice Frais xxx
What a thoughtful letter letting the reader know that you are thinking about them and that help is on the way.
What a heart felt message . Mia obviously has the ability to empathise and has been saddened by the awful happenings in the Phillipines . Full stops used often and appropriately.Please. Some more blogs as they are all so interesting.
Hi Mia
Great writing I loved reading it. It was very persuasive and encouraging plus had full stops in all the right places. You had a wide variety of sentence openers at the beginning which made it very interesting for the reader. There were a few spelling mistakes so you might want to check those but apart from that it was perfect, I can’t wait to read more pieces of your work.