Hello Zack,
Excellent descriptive writing! You used adjectives and adverbs well. I like the use of the word ‘stealthily’.
The ending was good as I was surprised when the murderer didn’t kill him. That was a twist in the tale that I wasn’t expecting! You could follow on with the next chapter so we can find out why!
Mrs Rowland, Essex ( Team 100 WC)
Hello Zack,
Excellent descriptive writing! You used adjectives and adverbs well. I like the use of the word ‘stealthily’.
The ending was good as I was surprised when the murderer didn’t kill him. That was a twist in the tale that I wasn’t expecting! You could follow on with the next chapter so we can find out why!
Mrs Rowland, Essex ( Team 100 WC)