I like the start and how each time you added another word. On the other hand in the middle it was too factual you could have made it rhyme or have a sort of rhythm.
I like the way you have designed this poem, growing in shape and words which are evocative and then leading to the facts about Chanukah. Then finishing with the images in our minds again of the glistening candles. Perhaps you could have ended with a question for us to think about the light the candles give, or the meaning of chanukah- the festival of light and whta it brings to us.
I like the start and how each time you added another word. On the other hand in the middle it was too factual you could have made it rhyme or have a sort of rhythm.
I like the way you have designed this poem, growing in shape and words which are evocative and then leading to the facts about Chanukah. Then finishing with the images in our minds again of the glistening candles. Perhaps you could have ended with a question for us to think about the light the candles give, or the meaning of chanukah- the festival of light and whta it brings to us.