I liked how you used “My heart hammered inside my chest” and “Sweat trickled down my for-head”. In some books they use sentences like that. You are very creative and very good. You wrote 100 words or more I can’t tell because I kind of lost track at the end.
Hi Mind boggler thanks for your comment it really helps my writing improve. An atom is a tiny particle that forms everything. Your house is made up of atoms and so is your car and your computer. They form objects. Also thank you Nicholas for your comment it does really motivate me to write more.
Hi Boaz
What a great piece if writing.
I enjoyed all the description you have used (sweat trickled down my fore-head).
Moreover, your writing was very intising because it was full of suspence.
Well done.
I liked how you used “My heart hammered inside my chest” and “Sweat trickled down my for-head”. In some books they use sentences like that. You are very creative and very good. You wrote 100 words or more I can’t tell because I kind of lost track at the end.
Great job! I love how you used words like “my heart hammered inside my chest.” One question what is an atom?
Hi Mind boggler thanks for your comment it really helps my writing improve. An atom is a tiny particle that forms everything. Your house is made up of atoms and so is your car and your computer. They form objects. Also thank you Nicholas for your comment it does really motivate me to write more.
Hi Boaz
What a great piece if writing.
I enjoyed all the description you have used (sweat trickled down my fore-head).
Moreover, your writing was very intising because it was full of suspence.
Well done.