You most certainly have creative ideas for stories as you span your tale of misty woods and mysterious monkeys. From the start, I wondered where your adventure might lead. Keeping your readers imaginations at work is a good writing technique to encourage them to keep reading. Well done. 🙂
I can see the care you have taken with spelling and punctuation. My suggestion would be to add one word to your third sentence… Owls were hooting up in the trees.
I hope you keep entering the 100WC. We might one day learn Dom’s fate at the hands of the monkey king. 🙂
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia
Hi there Konstantinos, I love your unique idea for your story. I enjoyed reading your entry. I found your sentence structures very effective. I wonder what those monkeys did to poor old Dom? And why did the monkey king put his thumb down when he saw him? Perhaps Dom had done something naughty? I want to read on to find out – that is a sign of a great writer so well done Konstantinos. Your spelling is spot on and I can see you have made good use of a range of punctuation including this ….. Do you know what these are called Konstantinos?
You have done a good job with this story. What an imagination you have! I could never have dreamed up such a thing. As you continue to write, remember to write complete sentences. They should all have a verb – an action word. You did a fantastic job punctuating the speech. I also like your use of the ellipsis at the end, but remember that it’s three dots like this: …
I hope to see more of your work in the 100 WC!
Hello Konstantinos,
You most certainly have creative ideas for stories as you span your tale of misty woods and mysterious monkeys. From the start, I wondered where your adventure might lead. Keeping your readers imaginations at work is a good writing technique to encourage them to keep reading. Well done. 🙂
I can see the care you have taken with spelling and punctuation. My suggestion would be to add one word to your third sentence…
Owls were hooting up in the trees.
I hope you keep entering the 100WC. We might one day learn Dom’s fate at the hands of the monkey king. 🙂
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia
Hi there Konstantinos, I love your unique idea for your story. I enjoyed reading your entry. I found your sentence structures very effective. I wonder what those monkeys did to poor old Dom? And why did the monkey king put his thumb down when he saw him? Perhaps Dom had done something naughty? I want to read on to find out – that is a sign of a great writer so well done Konstantinos. Your spelling is spot on and I can see you have made good use of a range of punctuation including this ….. Do you know what these are called Konstantinos?
You have done a good job with this story. What an imagination you have! I could never have dreamed up such a thing. As you continue to write, remember to write complete sentences. They should all have a verb – an action word. You did a fantastic job punctuating the speech. I also like your use of the ellipsis at the end, but remember that it’s three dots like this: …
I hope to see more of your work in the 100 WC!