Amazing Ted!
I was on the edge of my seat reading that piece of writing. I particularly liked how short the first sentence was because it gave a great affect. You also made it very creative which draws the reader in. Next time remember ellipses are for interruption in speech NOT cliff hangers.
This is a very confident post Ted, I really enjoyed getting involved in, it really draws the reader in. You just need to check one or two things – Summer needs a capital all the way through, you need “its” not “it’s” as “it’s” means “it is” not belong to it, and you need a “who” for your “how”. Keep it up!
What great description, I really liked some of your adjectives. I wanted to read more! Well done…
Amazing Ted!
I was on the edge of my seat reading that piece of writing. I particularly liked how short the first sentence was because it gave a great affect. You also made it very creative which draws the reader in. Next time remember ellipses are for interruption in speech NOT cliff hangers.
This is a very confident post Ted, I really enjoyed getting involved in, it really draws the reader in. You just need to check one or two things – Summer needs a capital all the way through, you need “its” not “it’s” as “it’s” means “it is” not belong to it, and you need a “who” for your “how”. Keep it up!