Your use of interesting language made this piece of writing so easy to read. I like the way that you included dialogue (talking), but remember to use a capital letter for the beginning of the speech. It was fantastic to see you offer some descriptions of the characters in your writing, well done.
Dear Bryn,
Your use of interesting language made this piece of writing so easy to read. I like the way that you included dialogue (talking), but remember to use a capital letter for the beginning of the speech. It was fantastic to see you offer some descriptions of the characters in your writing, well done.
Miss T (Team 100WC)